In <d58e83$spr$1@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
>, on 05/03/2005
at 08:00 PM, "Ton Veldhuis" <veldhuis@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
> said:
>Just finished my first website, meant for grades 9-12:
>http://members.home.nl/veldhuis/Abetterworld/a_better_world.htm
>Reactions appreciated.
My first impressions (from a USA reader):
- The fla****ng in the list needs to go. Its distracting. You want kids to
focus on the thoughts they have -- what the items mean to them. Not on
trying to read fla****ng words.
- I also do not like the focus on the word Be's. I think the focus needs
to be values and concepts, such as honesty, etc. The design drew my eyes
to the Be's. Not the values. I don't think that is what you want. Maybe
you can do the same thing with a different font for the Be's, and place
the emphasis on the value word instead. I'd have to think about it.
- In any event, ask your audience -- the kids what they see first when the
look. Usually kids are attracted to color and things that are fun to
read. Ask them for examples of websites that are "fun," for ideas.
I think the basic idea is there -- the wisdom of the ages found in the
quotes, and using them -- applying them as a guide to their life now and
what it should be as they mature -- but I'm not sure the kids who need to
think most are going to have the patience to work through the screens.
Maybe more color in the bars for power, society, etc., is needed?
Myself, for things that take considerable thought (or should) before
answering, I would prefer to be able to see the whole concept before
answering. -- But that is just me, a writer, trainer/teacher, school board
member.
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